Finally got the time to comment on your latest batch Omni, I'll write this as I'm reading it so I may change my mind as I carry on.
Love Catspaws concern over Gear and t's always good to read Kent making an appearance. Ral's time on the Gifted Agriculturalist of Tomorrow sounds like an adventure in itself. Also good to see the cadets helping each other out without asking too many questions or asking for anything in return.
I must admit to getting a little bit muddled in the next section with there being such a large cast, some with similar but not quite names like Ayrla, but that might be my post work brain failing
I like the team of Umbra and Tharok, dnt know why but they're both hard asses so perhaps its the potential fight brewing that's so appealing. The ancient threshold technology hiding a planet was a twist, I expected them to be far, far away. And Tharok's ongoing betrayal is great, he's such a little monster. Jo's excessive concern for Tinya is always funny, they are a pair of co-dependent drama queens but I still adore them.
The desolated golden planet is very ominous! And Tharok is still a sneak, he's great.
The Ark? Where the Omniphagos was discovered? That would be very cool if it is.
Yay! A giant floating pyramid in space, it must be the Omniphagos... musn't it?
Fuzzball sounds really idyllic.
Science Police Protocol: Rule 12-3omega - what a pest! Well, Ral could always animate a plant to be their third team member couldn't he?
Funny scene with Catspaw and Ral stripping down, and stopping pollutants from contaminating the world is a good rule to introduce though hopefully not too late.
Catspaw running off and digging her claws into the tree root to enjoy the smell is a nice piece of characterisation. "she couldn’t have looked happier or more harmless" Great line!
The cadets introducing themselves was rather sweet, nice that they acknowledge that they are people, not just entities on a training program.
Tinya and Umbra's dislike of Imra was very realistic, and I imagine they wouldn't be the only Legionnaires that felt that way either. smart of Tinya to figure out the pattern that worked the controls though its another cliffhanger about what's underneath...
“That really doesss look like the worssst way to travel.” Ha! Made me smile.
Poor Cadet Lour, no-one (apart from Cadet Evening of course) gives her the credit she's due. The dark man is as sneaky as ever, nice to see he's not letting the cadets ruin his plan to control the technology.
It's kind of funny that your description of Fuzzball and the natives reminds me of the planet and races in Avatar. The guards snarling at Ral was cute. April and her obvious love for her gran was very sweet. I really appreciate how you have rounded out her character Omni, she's never been a favourite of mine but as you write her she is definitely growing on me. Catspaw's Gran belief in the traditional ways was sweet too. Gran is my new favourite - todays lesson kids, never underestimate your friends gran! haha, she was really well written, with a nice sly humour.
Giant robots defending ancient secrets are a sci-fi trope that never gets old, and I'd forgotten that this Garth is 'Jarth' so was surprised by the transmutation trick, though it was good to see the Legionnaires working as a team to try to subdue it, even as it adapted to their attacks.
Jo to the rescue!
Oh, maybe not...
Is Tharok really trying or is he controlling the robot, or at least taing advantage of the situation?
What is cadet Astor's tird power? I'll have to go back and check now.
Great stuff Omni, you are keeping the excitement flowing while slipping in enjoyable moments of nice character development too, neer an easy task but you're managing just fine.
Looking forward to more, more and much more!